Weekend Writing Warriors :: #3
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My 8 sentences today, again, come from the first draft of Seven Sisters, Chapter Three. This is a bit more back-story to last week’s snippet, though it comes a few scenes later.
Stumbling into his apartment, Rogan slammed the door and collapsed onto the sofa. He’d been drinking a little too often lately; with the anniversary of his first love being this week.
He covered his face with his palms, brushing his shoulder-length brown hair behind his ears. Blue eyes fixed on the ceiling and his left arm dropped to the floor, his fist grasping around for a bottle of gin and his book.
Why he read so many romances, Rogan couldn’t explain. Perhaps, against the coldness of his daily routine, in these moment with Nora Roberts, he could shed tears over the women who’d held his heart. Every waking moment she was in his mind; the person who’d destroyed his happiness. He knew she was there, hiding around every corner, and laughing at his pitiful attempts to find her.
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Aww, that’s so sad – I feel for him. Very descriptive excerpt indeed!
Thanks for commenting. As he’s my antagonist, I’m glad he comes across as having feelings.
Very emotional excerpt. I can really feel his agony, and the need to live vicariously through fictional romance couples.
I’m glad I’ve managed to get that across. He’s just done some really horrible things and I wanted to share why he is how he is. Thanks for comment.
Very descriptive. Great job of drawing the reader into the scene. I love that he reads romances! Good eight! 🙂
Thanks Teresa!
I wonder if he will ever find her and why she is being so mean to him.
Ooh thanks for you comment – I’m glad you’ve sympathised with him. I’m trying to show his human side here as he’s done some horrible things by this point in the book.
I like the idea of a romance-reading hero.
Thanks for commenting! This has been really fascinating – not mentioning that he is my antagonist and that the scene before this he is torturing someone for information, the comments are purely on his character as he is underneath his actions.